Pitching ideas and initial thoughts of videos

Skills at the beginning of the course can be improved upon and referred back to later in the course and used as a reflective view to see how I have progressed (if I have..hopefully).
I pitched to an audience of nine females of various ages and recieved some very helpful and constructive critasism. 
Starting with the positive's;

• The song choice fits well with the narrative idea
• A 17yr old male likes the idea as our generation is fascinated with substance and alcohol abuse and misuse -examples of this is shown in the channel four series Skins and also through Rhiannas 'we found love' lyrics
• My initial ideas of lighting and camera angles were considered a really good idea
• The narrative of the music video can also be used to not only show how substances can not only affect people but also how they can create issues for people who decide to use them
• I can widen my audience through showing the issues implicitly rather than explicitly
• Another point of showing the issues implicitly can enable my audience to be more active rather than passive by making them think about the scenes that are being shown and therefore the more the audience pays attention the more they will notice within the video
•  Using an all (almost all) male cast can be a good use of actors as it can make my video appeal to a younger female audience 

And the improvements to be made;

• The music genre and the possibility of using an all male cast may result in my music video having a niche audience which would not be so good as my music video would only then appeal to a smaller audience
• The masculinity of the music genre may not appeal to females
• I need a more structured narrative with a beginning, middle and end 
• I need a better and stronger narrative - I can improve on this once I've learnt the narrative theories and how narrative works, once I've found a theory that I like I will cling to the theory and use it to structure my own narrative with my own ideas
• The ability of being able to film in low key lighting may create visibility issues